June 22nd - June 28th Homework

Date: 21st Jun 2018 @ 1:48pm

I want you to wow the whole class with your writing about this video. You can choose to write a description about what has happened in the video, a letter of apology from the man to the shop owner explaining why he wasn't able to deliver the fish to his shop / restaurant or you can write a newspaper report (in your homework book) about the mysterious road that was completely covered in fish and the local people had absolutely no idea where they had come from. Remember to take care with your punctuation and sentence variety. 

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Mr Loftus wrote:

I am really looking forward to reading your writing about this video.

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Cody wrote:

Dear the person at the fish shop,
My most thurer apology due to my idiotic donkey the fish that was ment to be deliverd to you was scaterd all over the road in a zig-zaged line because I played some fast Spanish music from Bob the fisherman.

Aaron wrote:

I like how you made it a letter.

Lucas wrote:

I really like your writing my favourite word zig zaged line because you’ve put a hyphen.

emma wrote:

I loved how you did a letter instead of a paragraph or two about the donkey

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lewis wrote:

"I am so sorry about not beeing able to give you the fish it was my falt I accidently nocked my donkey over then lost the fish went every were I am so sorry"

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Rhianna wrote:

The man with there blue top,packed all the fish on the donkey witch was very lazy then when he packed all the fish they walked on and they came up a path way and to signs and one lead through the dock and one were it was very steep to a village.Then all of a sudden the donkey stopped because he new that he was going up there with tones of fish on him.The man chuffed and then he slapped his bum and the donkey still didn't move and the man toyed to guide him there but he wasn't have ping none of it and sat down and fell asleep.Then he fell asleep and then he finally woke up and he found a radio and then he there favourite song and it woke the donkey up and then they danced up to the top and didn't notice that there fish was all scated everywhere on the hill path.The man hugged the donkey and got there boxes that had there fish then they fond them everywhere with there shocked faces and then the donkey gave him the radio and they started going down the hill dancing to their favourite song again.

Ava wrote:

Good work but you put:The man with there blue top.

Kai wrote:

I like the man chuffed and slapped his bum

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Ava wrote:

It was a warm day on the busy island, with that being said, someone loaded Mariza (the small brown donkey) up with two baskets of fish. When the person loaded the last basket she gave a sharp jerk then huffed. The man who had loaded her huffed back with half a smile.

Through the dusty,dry,sandy road the old man walked and the donkey heaved. Mariza's hooves clunked until they reached a sign which said Ano Chora right and Kato Chora left.
Mariza's ears turned up and she made a half shocked half scared noise. She looked at the sign. Oh no. The road she had to go up was so long and she was very lazy!

They walked further and further until. The owner of the donkey turned round with a stubborn look written on his face. He beckoned Mariza towards him with his fingers as she had stopped trotting. She didn't move but she puffed and tilted her head to the dock. The man looked then muttered "ah." patted the donkey then scowled and pointed to the long road which they were going up. Still Mariza shook her head. The old man made an angry noise then again pointed to the road. The stubborn donkey rolled her eyes at him. He clenched his fist in his face and made a frustrated wail. Then the owner of the donkey pushed and heaved Mariza as much as he could but it had no effect. The brown donkey looked at the man as if to say thats pointless. The old man was so angry that he punched the donkey hard. Mariza glared at him so viciously that The man now looked nervous. Since Jerry (the man) had failed to make the animal move he began to sulk. Jerry made a light hand gesture towards the seemingly endless path. Mariza sat down. So did the man, he sighed it was useless now. Mariza smiled and fell asleep.

An our later, the sun beamed down on them as it cooked the air and Jerry realised that if Mariza was asleep he could make her follow him. He played music right next to her,she awoke it was like she was hypnotised she stood and began to walk whilst dancing all the way to their destination. The donkey looked shocked in a bad way. The old man looked in the basket of fish. Well what was meant to have fish inside. Mariza had dropped them all down the road! They both stood there mouths both open until Mariza picked up the radio which they had bee listening to music on. They smiled.

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Harvey wrote:

There was once a man who lived on an island in the Pacific Ocean. He lived alone although he had one companion his trusted donkey. One day they both set out on a journey to the village at the top of a mountain.

During their trip the donkey saw a sign saying 1hour walk, that he was dreading so he stopped walking. Suddenly the man turned around and saw his donkey standing still so he politely asked it to keep moving. The donkey wouldn't move so the man decided to start pushing it. He still didn't move so the man, who was very angry, smacked him very hard on the bottom and that only made the donkey mad. The man decided to sit down for a bit and that suited the donkey fine.

Two hours past the man knew that he needed to get the donkey moving so he played its favorite music. The donkey heard the heavenly tune and stood up. Suddenly he started dancing so the man started to dance to. Both of them started to dance all the way up the road to the village.

When they arrived at the town the donkey was amazed that he had made it up there. The man looked at the baskets strapped onto donkey and saw nthat they were empty. He looked back at the road and his fish were all over it. The donkey saw what had happened and decided to pick up the radio. The man did the biggest smile ever. They both danced their way back along the road to collect the fish, best of friends.

Ava wrote:

Your opening paragraph is epic I like how you put his trusted donkey as its really different from other peoples writing.

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Dan wrote:

In an island far far away surrounded by beautiful blue sea stood a donkey carrying a basket of heavy fish nexto his owner. He made a noise with his mouth. Click! Click! And of they went onto the road.

The donkey's eyes clicked up at the signs. Ano Chora! He thought. That's miles away up and down roads. That's to far! I'm carrying baskets of fish!

The donkeys eyes were up and down. He stopped. He glared at his owner. He frowned. His owner turned to him. Click! Click! He made another noise with his mouth to communicate to the donkey. He flicked his head to a rich island as if he wanted to go there. His owner tapped his nose and grinned.

The owner got annoyed. He pointed in frustration. His face was full of anger. He strolled to the donkeys back one tryed to push him forward
"AAARRRGGGHHH!" he yelled in frustration. The owner hit him on the back and the donkey turned to his owner. The donkey said in his head. Don't hit me again! The man twinkled his fingers at him. The donkey lay down and smiled. So did the man.

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Aaron wrote:

The old man picked up a basket full of fish and started to move towards the stubbornest donkey in the world...MARIZA! He hooked the basket to the donkey." Eeee-oor!"shouted the donkey. The donkey glared at the man. They started to move along the long dusty road

Suddenly, the donkey sore a sign and sat down. The man couldn't get the donkey to move. They were both tierd so they went to sleep. In the morning ,the man started to play some music in a while they were dancing up the hill. By the time they got up there were no fish in the basket.

Ava wrote:

Your work is good. There's just one thing when you put the donkey sore the sign that sore means hurting. The sore you need to put is saw. Other than that though your work is great. I like how you ended the writing.

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Kai wrote:

There once lived a donkey and an old man they had to take two baskets of fish to a village at the top of the island . The man put the baskets of fish on the donkey they started walking up the hill when the donkey saw the sign he stopped he didn't want to move . The old man demanded for the donkey to move he angrily pointed he refused the old man was angry. He tried to push him but he was to heavy he tried again but he still wouldn't move the donkey sat down so did the old man . He thought of an idea he played music and it got the donkey moving . He started dancing it was like he couldnt controll it . They happily danced up the hill when they got to the top they realised all the fish had all fell out they didn't care and they carried on dancing.

Aaron wrote:

I like how you put they didn't care about the fish.

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Ciaran wrote:

This man and his donkey had to go on a long journey. They attached a big basket and it was weighing the donkey down then they came across a road sign and the donkey realised what a long, tiring journey he had to go on. As a result of this, the donkey refused to move, the man started to get angry so he hit the donkey on the back to try to get him to move. The man tried lots of different ways to move the donkey but nothing worked, the donkey wouldn't move! Then they both had a rest, the man woke up and remembered that the donkey liked to dance to the music so he found his tape recorder and began to play his favourite tune. All of a sudden, the donkey started dancing, as he danced he began to move along the road. Then they danced to the top of a hill where the restaurant was. When the man had a look in the basket, he saw nothing! Where had all the fish gone? He looked back along the road that he had travelled on and all the fish were on the floor! The man got the music player back out and then he started to play his favourite tune again.

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Hannah wrote:

In the desert,behind some broken, cracked walls, was a donkey waiting the old man too come back. The old man arrived carrying a basket, what was in the basket? Walking along the dusty path,there was silence. They came to the road the donkey stopped it was to hot for the donkey to carry on he wanted to turned back.

Tense,angry man tried to push the donkey along he was staying there. The old man must want something delivering.

The donkey looks and the old man and follows him with his head. Getting angrier and angrier he man storms off and sits down after the donkey lies down in the middle of the road. The old man takes out a radio and starts to play the donkeys favourite song he stands up and starts walking towards the man.

They dance along up the road they arrive at the shop he reaches over to the donkeys basket we’re were the fish angry, upset the man takes a few steps back. When they were dancing they must have dropped all of the fish. The man upset, soon smiled after the donkey handed the radio to the old man they danced again.

Emma wrote:

make sure you put the right type of to because the is three types the two as in the number, the too that you put as in can I come too and the to as in I am going to the park. otherwise very enjoyable.

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Owen wrote:

Putting the donkey in a shock, the strange, elderly man throws a basket of fish on the donkeys saddle . Walking across sea and land the donkey spots a sine and trembles in fear. The man strokes him then points to get moving. The donkey shakes his head. The elderly man pushes him. The donkey laughs. The annoyed man smacks the donkey then furiously the donkey turns around but keeps his anger inside.

Asleep, not knowing what is about to happen, the angry man put on music to get the donkey moving they danced and danced until they arrived. The donkey doesn’t know where he is. The elderly man picks up the baskets but there is no fish. A fish stood and lay in front of him. He looks up all the fish lay in the middle of the road then the donkey passes the radio to him then he turns the music back on.

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Emma wrote:

In a town, in a village there lived a very stubborn donkey. This donkey’s owner was going to try and make the donkey do a delivery to the town he hated most. The donkeys owner had filled a basket which raw fish and hooked it on the donkey. As they started walking the donkey stopped and carried on making a walking noise, clip clop clip clop. Then the owner noticed this and started trying to push and shove the donkey to move. But the donkey just stayed stationary and sat down. As the poor man was sat in the shade he had an idea he pulled a radio out of his bag and started to play music. This music was the donkey’s favourite song. The donkey started to dance and this got the donkey right up to the town. The donkey and owner spun and spun round and round. The owner just realised that all the fish in the donkeys basket had fallen out and peacefully they walked home.

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Alfie wrote:

As a nice man put a cargo of fish on a donkey. They set of on a long journey to a city after a while the pour donkey realised he was going up a mountain he sat round and didn't move the old man had a paddy and sat doun he had a plan he turned on the radio and woke the donkey suddenly they boogied all the way they and got there and realised he lost all the fish instead of shouting he put on the radio and danced.

Ava wrote:

I like how you put the old man had a paddy instead of just the man was angry.

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maddison wrote:

Dear, Fish and go!

I write this letter with the most sincere of apologese. The truth of the matter is that I have lost your fish delivery. You see the weather was blistering on the day of your delivery, so donkey decided to take a rest on he road side. I was worried the your fish wasn't going to be delivered on time. So I came up with an idea to get donkey moving again! Funny thing is donkey enjoys dancing, so i tried to encourage him with a bit of music. Before we knew it we got a bit carried away and by the time we reached your shop the baskets of fish were empty. We did have a lot of fun and I hope you can see the funny side of this. I will double up on your fish order next time for free.

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Amaar wrote:

The donkey walked and walked until he couldn't walk no more and it soon fell asleep. The old man soon put on music made the donkey woke up and-STARTED DANCING!!! They soon got there and just realized they lost all there fish. Soon the donkey got the old man putting his music on.

Ava wrote:

Nice description but next time add a bit more to make it even better.

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Josh wrote:

On an island in the middle of the ocean, at the bottom of a hill with a twisting, lengthy path, was a man, lifting up a basket, which was filled with fish, and bringing it to a dull-faced donkey. When the basket had hit impact on the donkey's back, he jumped a bit and yelled. The old, cheery man's face had light grey eyebrows and the same colour was on his moustache. He took a step back and sighed in relief. He made a clicking sound with his mouth and started walking up the hill, his donkey following.

When they started walking up the hill, the donkey noticed a sign. The sign simply read, Ano Chora. There was a sign underneath it saying Kato Chora. Both signs had arrows. One pointing right. The other was pointing left. The donkey didn't think too much of it, but then he looked to it's right. and noticed the road was bending and going up to a small town on top of the hill. Shocked, irritated, bitter-faced donkey put his head down in defeat. But it had an idea. It stopped. The sound of clopping along the road was stopped. The fisherman noticed this and stopped to turn around. The irritated, furious donkey turn it's head to the left, where a town at the bottom of the hill stood. The man understood. He stroked the donkey in sympathy, but then with a stern face, he pointed to where they were supposed to be. The donkey shook its head in disapproval. Then the man pointed with an even sterner face and pointed again. The donkey looked away. He groaned in fury and made a gesture with his hand like he was squeezing a ball. Smugly, the donkey pulled its lip out like a three-year-old not getting its way. His owner was getting super agitated, so he decided to move the donkey with force. He went to the back of the donkey and started pushing it like a boulder. The donkey wouldn't budge. The donkey looked back with the same expression. Furiously, the man decided to punch the back of the donkey. Its expression became wide-eyed. It turned around like it was ready for a fight. He sighed again and went in front of the donkey and gestured for it to go up the hill. This time, it just sat down. He gave up and sat down close to the donkey, which had started to go to sleep, letting himself be a victim of the scorching sun.

The man had been sitting there for a while, trying to come up with something. He had come up with nothing at all for what felt like hours; then an idea came. He towered over the unconscious body of the lazy donkey, with a stereo. He pressed play. The song started. The donkey heard. His eyes wide open, he got up and stared. They started to move to the beat. The donkey couldn't resist the urge. It was too tempting. His sub-conscious started to take control of its entire body. The music started to get faster. So did his legs. The donkey then just decided to embrace it and dance. They started to move up the snake-like road up the hill. Dancing until they got to the top.

When the song finished, they were panting like dogs. The cunning man showed the donkey where they were, and the donkey's jaw dropped like it weighed a ton. He was tricked. The man smiled to himself. He went to pick up the basket, but then realised it was surprisingly light. He looked down. It was empty. Not a single fish inside. So was the other one. He looked over to the entrance of the town. There was a fish laying on the ground. He went over to pick it up, but when he picked it up, he looked at the road. Fish were scattered all along it, like freckles on a face. His jaw couldn't move. It was stuck dropped. The donkey came over to the carnage and felt ashamed. He then went to pick up something. The man looked over to see what he went to pick up. It was the stereo.

Felicity wrote:

Very descriptive! :-)

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Amy wrote:

Dear sir,
I’m sincerely sorry to that I have not been able to deliver my fish too your shop today. My donkey that carries all of it would not walk up the hill. To make him move up it, I had to put music on. He danced up to the top of the hill;all of the fish spilt out of the baskets and got squashed. Again I am extremely sorry.

Kind regards, the fish delivery man

Ava wrote:

I like how you repeated that he was sorry it makes it more realistic.

Aaron wrote:

I like it

Kai wrote:

I like the story because the man is very sory

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Felicity wrote:

Dear Stavros,
I am sincerely sorry for not delivering your fresh fish to your World famous restaurant. My stubborn donkey (Mariza) refused to even budge up the tall mountain, which your restaurant proudly stands on.

As this is my first time being unable to deliver your fish, I hope you accept my apology. I am not sure what I am going to go with Mariza but whatever I do it will be for the best.

If any of your customers requested for a refund on that day, I will gladly pay them back instead of you. Good luck in the future of your popular restaurant!

Best Wishes,

Orien
(your reliable fisher)

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Joe wrote:

The man harshly dropped the very heavy fish on to the poor lookingdonkey . Then the man had a very epic idea. To put a Spanish song on the radio so they were dancing right up the hill but when they turned around the fish was all over the floor. So the man turned the radio on and all went

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Joe wrote:

So they danced all the way down the hill.

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