June 2018 Write a small conversation.
Date: 7th Jun 2018 @ 3:19pm
Write a small converstation between the two character, but make sure you have punctuated it properly.
Date: 7th Jun 2018 @ 3:19pm
Write a small converstation between the two character, but make sure you have punctuated it properly.
Erin wrote:
"Do you know where my glasses are?"said the poor old lady.
The old man replied with an attitude,"No and why have you lost them again?"
Amaar wrote:
Good.
Aaron wrote:
Very good!
Megan wrote:
I like your sentence Erin
Felicity wrote:
I like yours it is really funny.
Tom wrote:
Well done in not saying said and replied and making it more interesting.
Emma wrote:
“Hello.” commented the small woman with grey hair.
“Hello how are you feeling today?” Replied the bald man with a bowling jumper on.
“Very well thank you,yourself?” The woman questioned.
“Fine really.” He commented
wrote:
Good sentences. New line new speaker
Megan wrote:
Good sentence Emma
Amy wrote:
I really like yours. It is very funny.
Amaar wrote:
Great
Rhianna wrote:
Really good sentence emma
Aaron wrote:
Really good
Josh wrote:
Should of been a comma instead of a full stop at the end of the speech. For example
“Hello,” commented the small woman with grey hair.
Alfie wrote wrote:
Very good
Lucas wrote:
Remember to do new line new speaker.
Owen wrote:
“What time is it?’asked the old woman. “It is six thirty.’replied the old man.
Dan wrote:
New line new speaker.
Harrison wrote:
You should put a comma before asked and after the speech marks
Cody wrote:
You listened very clearly (short speech)
Megan wrote:
Good sentence
Aaron wrote:
New line new speaker
Aaron wrote:
New line new speaker
Lucas wrote:
Good work Owen
Harvey wrote:
You need new line new speaker
Megan wrote:
(New line new speaker)
Joe wrote:
The lady with grey hair said, “Where do you want to go today?”
“Why don’t we go the park,” the man said with his green and white t-shirt.
Kai wrote:
Nice work
Dan wrote:
Good work Joe
Josh wrote:
Good one
Aaron wrote:
Very good
Joel wrote:
Good work
Lucas wrote:
Nice one joe
Megan wrote:
I like your sentence joe .
Josh wrote:
Good punctuation
Steven wrote:
You need a space between each speaker example: the lady with grey hair said,” where do you want to go today?”
“Why don’t we go the park,”said the man with green pants and a white t-shirt.
Cody wrote:
"Hello," said the old woman.
"Hi," responded the old man.
"How are you doing," asked the man.
"Fine," responded the old woman.
Aaron wrote:
Very good
Cody wrote:
Thank you Arron .
Megan wrote:
Good sentence
Alfie wrote:
Pope “How are you doing you look sick?”
Charles “Just fine I just feel sick.”
Aaron wrote:
Good
Alice wrote:
Put stuff like pope asked and Charles replied but keep up the good work Alfie.
Cody wrote:
Alfie good but it could of been longer you listened to well *short speech*
Steven wrote:
There is boy and girl why are there only boy names
Felicity wrote:
Maybe next time you could put asked or replied but other than that it is great.
Amy wrote:
“Come on Tommy,” Nora said “ Why can’t you just watch this movie.”
“Because love,” he replied “ I don’t want to,”
“But you never watch anything I want to and I watch everything you do!”
“Yes because everything you watch is horror and you know after our first date I don’t like things like that.”
“Ok but I’m expecting you do watch something I like!”
“Ok, I will love. Thanks,” Tommy said happily and thankful.
Blossom wrote:
Really good!
Hannah wrote:
Nice work
Cody wrote:
New line new speakers.
Amaar wrote:
That’s awesome.
Maddison wrote:
Well done!
Aaron wrote:
Nice work
Aaron wrote:
Nice work
Josh wrote:
“What are we having for tea tonight?” Betty asked her husband.
“We’re having fish and chips, dear,” Ben replied.
“What are you having?” She asked.
“Gravy, chips, sausage, fish and sauce.”
“Okay, I’ll have the same,” she told him.
“I’m just ordering it now,” he said.
wrote:
Me and you are the only ones who did new line new speaker
Tom wrote:
Great work
Patrick wrote:
I like the way you you placed the scene
Amaar wrote:
Well in
Joel wrote:
Nice work Josh
Owen wrote:
Great work you have done new line new speaker.
Lucas wrote:
Josh nice work you remembered to do new line new speaker.
Patrick wrote:
the lady sad “ what is this on the news about the queen?” The man said “I don’t know I think she’s coming to Liverpool to see the cruse ship that is on the dock.”
Dan wrote:
New line new speaker
wrote:
Said not sad
Aaron wrote:
Start with a capital letter
Emma wrote:
Good job Patrick make share you use capital letters. Also remember new speker new line,
The lady said “What is this on the news about the Queen?” The man said “ I don’t know I think she is is coming to Liverpool to see the cruise sip that is on the dock.”
Maddison wrote:
“Hello can you help me I have lost my glasses do you know were they are?” The old lady asked.
The old man replied, “no I don’t know were your glasses are you keep on asking! I am am to busy feeding my cats so I can’t help you find your glasses! You can go now.”
“Fine!”The lady said as she walked out the room.
Aaron wrote:
Start speech with capital letter.
Hannah wrote:
Good work you have punctuated the speech very well and extended the end of the sentence
Felicity wrote:
After the speach marks you accidentally put a capital letter! Oops!
Blossom wrote:
That’s really good I really like the part when you put I am to busy feeding my cats .
Amaar wrote:
“ Oh hello”, said the old woman. “ how’s your day today”, the man.
C wrote:
Good but new line new speaker.
Cody wrote:
Good scentence but new line new speaker
Aaron wrote:
New line new speeker
Tom wrote:
" Do we still have milk," said Grandma.
" No, I'll go and get some at the shop," Grandpa said.
"When you go can you get biscuits as well?" asked Grandma.
"Sure, which biscuits?" replied Grandpa.
"Digestives ,love,"Said Grandma.
Dan wrote:
Nice work Tom
Harvey wrote:
This has been the best I’ve read
Josh wrote:
Very clever and the punctuation is great.
Blossom wrote:
“Hi honey u okay” Brian said calmly.
“Yes I’m fine why are you asking”? Replied Cassandra.
“To see if you want to go out for tea” Brian asked.
“Sure where to”?
“How about kfc? Brian said
“Okay Brian”.
“Let’s go then Cassandra”.
Erin wrote:
Good sentences and punctuation
Felicity wrote:
Instead of putting u put you
Amy wrote:
You need put the . on the last sentence inside the speech marks. “ Let’s go then Cassandra.”
wrote:
Great work new line new speaker
Maddison wrote:
Nice work! Don’t forget to put all punctuation in the speech marks.
Francesca wrote:
Nobody noticed but you put the question marks after the speech marks on lines 2,4 and you did not add closing speech marks on line 5.
C wrote:
You put the question marks after the speech marks and you didn't add closing speech marks ether but apart from those mistakes I loved your work it was very creative.
Rhianna wrote:
“What time is its” said the old women “it's time for lunch” replied the old man “ok thank you” shouted the old women “your welcome” whispered the old man.
Dan wrote:
You need to do new line new speaker.
C wrote:
It is a good sentence but you need to do new line new speaker :)
Emma wrote:
Very funny Rhiannah but remember new speaker new line
Emma wrote:
New speker new line
Amy wrote:
Remember new line new speeker.
Felicity wrote:
It is very funny but remeber new line new speaker. :-)
Steven wrote:
“Oh deary I dropped my glasses out side and I can’t get them because of my back can you get them for me”,Said the old lady. “Ok next time u have to use the grabber from the loft”, said the tired old man
Ciaran wrote:
Well done Steven good use of speech
Kai wrote:
Good work
Lucas wrote:
Good one Steven
Owen wrote:
You need a question mark after me.
Felicity wrote:
“Did you remember to go to the shops and get tea bags, Barry” questioned Betty to her husband.
“Tea bags?I...I can’t remeber?” replied the forgetful, old man.
“We should really go to the doctors to see if you are okay because you keep forgetting things” suggested the anxious lady.
“No I’m fine. What’s a hospital?” asked Barry, who was trying to think very hard.
Felicity wrote:
Sorry I forgot some punctuation.
Erin wrote:
This is very good and entertaining speech
Joe wrote:
That is great
Harrison wrote:
“What should we do now?”,asked the elderly women with grey hair.
“Do you want a cup of tea?,replied the old man.
“Yes please”,said the women as she licked her lips.
Emma wrote:
Good make share you put speech marks
Joel wrote:
Nice work Harrison
C wrote:
"Hi hunny would you like to go to the park? I heard that Edna is going too!" Edith suggested excitedly.
"Erm Sure Edith ; speaking of parks they are getting a new cafe we're those flats used to be " Bob exlamed as Edith soon interrupted.
"No ; Edna is going to be there and I've baked a fresh Bach of cookies and they are her favourite" said Edith trying to get her way.
"FINE" shouted bob as her didn't want to go.
Hannah wrote:
Really good
Felicity wrote:
There is some random capital letters but keep up the good work!
C wrote:
Thank you Hannah
Leon wrote:
“Where are you going today ” said the old man
“Nowhere” said the old lady
Francesca wrote:
You should have put a comma before the closing speech marks
Alice wrote:
You need a full stop at the end
Josh wrote:
Remeber to finish your sentences with full stops.
Harvey wrote:
You need a comma after the end of the first speech
Harvey wrote:
Matilda said to John ‘How are you ?’
John replied ‘I’m great how are you ?’
Matilda said happily’ I couldn’t be better.’
Hannah wrote:
“Do you know where the bread is?” said the old lady.
The man replied with anger, “no!”
Felicity wrote:
You forgot to put in a capital letter for no.
Blossom wrote:
Amazing!
Maddison wrote:
This is amazing. You used great punctuation!
Aaron wrote:
“Hello,” said granny.
“Hi,” said grandad.
Cody wrote:
You listened to welll to instructions it's a bit short don't you think
Aaron wrote:
Yes
Dan wrote:
"Do you know what time it is?" The old man said after he woke up after his horrible sleep. "
" It's quarter past four, get to sleep!" His wife said with anger.
" Sorry, it had a bad sleep."
Owen wrote:
This is great but you need to do new line new speaker.
Francesca wrote:
“Edna? Did you know Edith is going to bingo?” Asked Ted .
“No I have some serious news for you Guys,” Edna told her husband and son.
“What ?” Said their son
“We’re getting a dog!” Said Edna exitedly
Hannah wrote:
Good job
Blossom wrote:
Good!
wrote:
You should have used a comma. No, I have some serous news for you guys
Dan wrote:
You need to put a full stop after Said Edna exitedly
Alice wrote:
“Hello how are you,” asked the old man, at the bus stop.
“Jeff my old friend. I’ve not seen you in so long!” Exclaimed the old lady.
“Let’s chat when the bus arrives,” Jeff asked.
“Ok!” She answerd.
wrote:
You should of used a , after hello in the first sentence
Hannah wrote:
You have punctuated the speech very well.
Joel wrote:
"Are you ok said grane".
"Yes am fine replied grandad".
"Good said grane".
Lucas wrote:
“Do you know my glasses are?”said the old lady
The man replied “yes I will get them for you” replied the old man.
Kai wrote:
“How are you ? ” said the granny
“ I’m fine .” replied the grandpa
“Sorry I’ve got to go now ”
“ By . ” shouted the granny
Alice wrote:
You put the wrong by in that it’s bye.
Ciaran wrote:
“Hi,” said granny
“Hi how are you,”repiled grandad
“Fine,”said granny
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