Stone Age Holiday

Date: 30th Mar 2016 @ 8:34am

Imagine that you work for a holiday company and you have been asked to persuade people to go on holiday to Om's camp. What would you tell them about the camp to convince them that it is a GREAT place to go on holiday?

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Cody Alice wrote:

Do you want to go on a boring old holiday in a smelly, boring and dreadful hotel. But why not try this brand new holiday in the Stone Age you have to kill your beautiful ,ugly meal in a majestic forest and stand bye the river waiting to kill your fish And have to achieve your home to sleep in like a resting angel on your beautiful soft grass and animal skin. Please try our new holiday in the Stone Age.

Ava wrote:

Good pice of work. But you can only pick one beautiful or ugly.?

steven wrote:

good work

aaron wrote:

I like your list sentence.

ciaran wrote:

Good extend noun phase

patrick wrote:

good work cody and alice you need similis

Joe wrote:

Nice adgedive alic and cody.butiful ugly dosent make sence.

Dan wrote:

I like your sentence what is. Do you want to go on a boring old holiday in a smelly, boring and dreadful hotel.

Harvey wrote:

put a few more full stops in there and make sure it makes sense

Erin wrote:

Great work I like your extended noun phrase try to put a simile in.

Ava wrote:

You can only choose one beautiful or ugly. Which one?

Felicity wrote:

If you were hunting for your own food you wouldn't call it ugly.

Joshua G wrote:

And have to achieve your home to sleep in like a resting angel on your beautiful soft grass and animal skin. What an a great sentence!

harrison wrote:

great extened noun phrase at the start

Amy and Aisha wrote:

Choose one ugly or beautiful. Love your first sentence.

Erin wrote:

Choose ugly or beautiful.Great extended noun phrase.

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Ava wrote:

Why go on a normal plain beach holiday? That's roasting. Where you get burnt like a crisp every moment. Where the poolside is crammed with people. When you can be here at stone age resort. Here you can go back in time to the stone age! Here you can make needles out of animal bones from the animal you hunted! Where you can sleep in home made houses. Its the right place for artists because you can paint on the walls of a massive grey cave! There's many many more.

Lewis wrote:

I like your sentence and I really want to go to the stone age now. well done!

Felicity wrote:

In your sentence explain what is roasting.

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patrick wrote:

you should go to stone age and you can create thing you want and make sheltas and sleep in them and you can make smoked cow and lots and lots of things and you can make more friends so have a try.

Joshua G wrote:

Make sure to use capital letters and full stops. Also try and say the beach is rubbish.

Dan wrote:

Make sure you do capital letters for a start of a sentence. put a ? mark in for a questions

Amaar wrote:

great sentence type

Erin wrote:

Make sure you put a capital letter at the start of your sentence . Try to put a question in . Good work.

charlotte t wrote:

put averbs in Patrick

Ava wrote:

remember to start a sentence with a capital letter.

Dan wrote:

Don't put a lot of and instead you should of used commas ,

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Harvey wrote:

Do you want to go to the same old beach holiday were you have the same old boring food and have to share a pool with everyone or do you want to go to the stone age and stand near a fabulous river with a spear waiting for a massive fish and then catch it. Also you have a party every night . If that isn't good enough then think of you burning to death and trying to find shade with people destroying your privacy. You would be able to build your own home and have your very own privacy then you skin a amazing, huge dear .

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steven wrote:

Do you want to smell sweat all around you?. and be in a noise pool?. or you could go to stone age were you could fish. with a spear and catch one and feel proud then you can celebrate in a village and dray fish and sower cloths and beak food. and under the grass there is soft fabric.

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Harrison wrote:

Why do you want smell sweat all around.It is horrible in the hotels there is bumpy
beds and stinking air fresheners. In stone age it is well better. You can hunt your own food it is great you have to make your own clothes and shelter. you can hunt tigers it is amazing. the caves have big, amazing wall art.

Ava wrote:

Nice extended noun phrase for the cave wall.

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Megan wrote:

Do you want to go to the same holiday? that smell you because they or hot and a donkey came over and hit you on the head and it heat you .

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Megan wrote:

Do you want to go to the same holiday? that smell you because they or hot and a donkey came over and hit you on the head and it heat you .

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Megan wrote:

Do you want to go to the same holiday? that smell you because they or hot and a donkey came over and hit you on the head and it heat you .

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Megan wrote:

Do you want to go to the same holiday? that smell you because they or hot and a donkey came over and hit you on the head and it heat you .

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Megan wrote:

Do you want to go to the same holiday? that smell you because they or hot and a donkey came over and hit you on the head and it heat you .

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Megan wrote:

Do you want to go to the same holiday? that smell you because they or hot and a donkey came over and hit you on the head and it heat you .

charlotte t wrote:

you have to use adevens and this ; in seed of because

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Joe wrote:

Do you really want to go back to the days when you cant play in the pool where the is no room and when youre at the beach you will smell the over persons sweat on the person.Or would you want to go to the lovly stone age.you can do what ever you want to do if you want you can hunt for any fink you want to like hunt for fish and skin anmals and gess what you hath to to build a shealter if you want?.you can hunt for a loveily dilish,jusy s and strong anmal.You can eat a lovely slimy amal they are nice.

owen wrote:

You have done fabulous work but you need to check your spellings like your and lovely well done.

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marcus wrote:

When I went to a rubbish resort. I was bord. but then I heard this good resort.
so I told my friends. and my friends were pleased. so all friends. came and me
but me and my friends.

Erin wrote:

I love your conjunction

Maddison wrote:

We'll done for using conjunctions but try to put a slime

Lewis wrote:

I like what you wrote but your last sentence didn't make sense.

Erin wrote:

Try to put a simile in.

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Erin wrote:

Do you want to go on the same old holiday? Where people try to smell all over you because they are that sweaty like a donkey that has just walked with a 100kg weighed man that has been on top of you for hours. When you put sun cream all over you so you don ' t get burnt that you get as crispy , fried as a chip . You have the same dirty , uncomfortable and rusty bed it wouldn't be nice to quickly run into bed.

patrick wrote:

amazing work Erin you similes

Felicity wrote:

Try and put stuff about the Stone Age like how you make the food.

Dan wrote:

Try and use more list sentence's and more sentence types like afew more similes

Amaar wrote:

great simaly

marcus wrote:

great outstanding punctuation

Erin wrote:

I didn't get to talk about the stone age because I think I spent to much time talking about the awful holiday.

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Dan wrote:

Do you want to go on a boring, old holiday like every year?. Do you want to be burnt like a burnt chip and keep putting loads of sun cream on?. Why do you want to be in the boring hotel and just buy your food?. Why do you want to go on the same beach not being bothed to do anything and lay down and looking at the sea bored?. Why do you want to be in a pool with lots of noisy children?. don't you go to a holiday in the stone age where you can make your own shelter out of wood, stone, leaves, and grass. You can burn of your calories and run around killing dears, antelope, and different types of animals you can kill fish with spears. Also you can rest your head on soft grass and leaves.

Marcus wrote:

I like the wood,stone, leaves, and grass killing dears and kil fish

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Ciaran wrote:

Do you really wont to stay in a rusty ,old hotel . Or do you want to stay in a really old stone age holiday if you go to the old hotel .You will have to go to the old swimming pool all over a gen but if you go to the stone age holiday you cud go fishing with spears .

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Amaar wrote:

Why go to boring old hotels where you can not sleep and on the beds have all bumps on the bed. Go to the stone age where the is a massive space. You are stood at the side of river with a spear in your hand and hunting a dear like running to a shop. But lying on grass.

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Aaron wrote:

Do you want to go on the same beach holiday? With sweaty people surrounding you. In an old, horrid hotel or in an comftibal hut!

MEGAN wrote:

Well done

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Lewis wrote:

You never want to go back to your old, smelly beach holiday. Why don't you try something like this. Maybe you can try a lovely stone age holiday; you can go fishing for the best fish you have ate. How about you go in a cave and spot some cave paintings.

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Felicity wrote:

Do you want to stay in the same old, boring beach holiday? Were you have everybody's sweat all over or would you like to go to a warming, little village with a beautiful sunset every night. You get tired of walking to the same restaurant with the same food which is fish'n'chips or go out hunting for your own clean, tasty deer. Would you like to go in the same dirty, smelly car or go on a quite, comfy stroll keeping yourself fit and healthy. Whilst you are gently making a fluffy, comfortable tent for your family the whole village sings an old tune they bang their hammers in time with the music.

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Amy and Aisha wrote:

Do you really want to go on the boring same old beach holiday? Where you get boring , old food. Do you want to go on the beach all day finding shade and getting as burnt as a chip. Go the same hotel. Have loads of kids playing and splashing around in the pool so you have no room to play. Well you should go on a Stone Age holiday. You not just sitting around on the beach . You always have something to do. You don't have to eat disgusting food from a pub. You go to the river with your friends to catch your fish. Or if you're not at the river you will be catching your beautiful , delicious and lovely meal for the night time. In the night, you will have a party. You will be a lovely warm hut sleeping on the cosy , green grass.

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charlotte t and owen wrote:

How boring is it staying in a hotel full of people you don't know and playing in the pool full of babies that are stinky, smelly. It is boring putting sun cream on so you don't get burnt like a person living on the sun instead why don't you have a holiday in the stone age? You can catch fish with your deadly, sharp spears and you get to live in a lovely village that is all man made. You can live in a shelter witch you have built. Your family can also skin animals and eat the thick, rotten and bloody meat.

Later that day, you could go and hunt for animals like reindeers, goats and bulls. But if you want to hunt them you have do it quickly. To build a beautiful, lovely tent you have to have sticks, bones and animal skin.

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joel wrote:

Would you like to go on to a boring, old and rocky beach holiday? come hear to a STONE AGE holiday and go fishing with your spear what you made your self shelter that you made with your friends and put your lousy head on the best pieces of grass. The shelter has beutiaful walls

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Leon wrote:

I would not like to 300 degrges on the beach

Francesca wrote:

so where else would you go instead.

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Joshua G wrote:

Do you want to go on the same, old beach holiday? Where you go in the sea with your cloths on and get super cold. Lying on the sand where people have been before and going to the same old restaurant? Well why not go the stone age? You stand next to a glistening ,diamond lake flowing like hair in the wind. You hold a spear in one hand and a net in the other, and wait slowly until a fish is passing by and you stab your fish in its back ,with your spear. You make your houses instead off buying a hotel for fifty pound. This costs nothing but skill. Because you made it yourself ,you feel more victorious than winning the world cup.

Joe wrote:

That was a fabulis sentice

Aaron wrote:

Amazing adverb Joshua !

marcus wrote:

Love the ideas and a good sentences

Mr Loftus wrote:

I'm sold. Where do I sign up? Your simile about the river was absolutely outstanding.

Harvey wrote:

Best similes ever josh

Leon wrote:

I love your simely

ciaran wrote:

I love your simile

Amy wrote:

Love your simile .

Joshua G wrote:

you sign up at stone age holiday station

Erin wrote:

Great simile

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rhianna wrote:

Do you want to go to the same old beach or the spectacular stone age where you catch your fish with a spear but you get a bow and arrow and shoot your dear

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Francesca wrote:

Are you going on a boring seaside holiday , do you want to get sunburnt ? Lying on a towel after being in the freezing cold sea or you can go to Om s camp where you can hunt for your food in a pack /family .You can build your own shelter and make sure you are warm , safe.

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kai and joshua mc wrote:

I always go to the same old boring beach where everybody stinks of sweat. why
not go to the stone age times where you can hunt , fish , build your own homes and best of all hunt for your food. you can skin animals make weapons you can make after you have your tea then slowly grab grass and put it on your flour

Later in the day, relax on your soft and comftable grass after a exiting wonderfull day.

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Megan wrote:

I like your list sent well down *

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Lucas wrote:

Do you want to just keep on going on the boring old holiday when everyone smells of sweat or just try this 5 star hotel and you get amazing rooms with pools and hot tubs and children are aloud to come in but not little children because it can be dangerous. also their is huge TV with sweet and the hotel is free also we have pool shop with balls and sharks.

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Cody Alice wrote:

Do you want to go on a boring holiday? Do you want to be as burnt as a chip? Are you bored of the normal? Why not try the extreme? In the stone Age. You can choose whatever you like for dinner! This includes not having to pay 20 million pound including the bill. No problem in Stone Age you don't have to pay anything.

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charlotte wrote:

Do you want to go to the boring , old holiday or would you go to the 5 star hotel were there is a hot tub and children from seven and over and also you can fish in one of our many flowing lake and try and catch a fish and then eat it.

Maddison wrote:

Try and use some extended noun phrases but I like the way you have put an adjective in between the words many and lake.

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Hannah wrote:

Do you want to go to the same old beach holiday were people are all sweating around you. What about going back to stone age. Where you can sit beside the river and wait for a big, yummy fish. When you get back from having a day of a life time.

Marcus wrote:

Well done but I Love the preparations

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Maddison and Blosson wrote:

Don't you want to go on a beautiful, bright holiday instead of going on a boring Beach with nothing to do and sitting in a cold, chilly pool. But why not come to our stone age village were you can lay comfortably in one of our most

marcus wrote:

I like the extended noun phrase

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